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melodyofmay(lynn)

In addition,
- Home -> what's new
"If you would purchase any kinds of punch-class cards on Open House Day, you will get one Free Zumba Class."
这里的would好象应该去掉，or make it short as : Purchase any package on Open House Day and receive one Zumba class FREE!

- About Me -> Friends -> Yoga Sanctuary
"The one of Best Yoga studioes in Toronto. I recommend you could find lots of beginning and advanced Yoga Class.
是不是可以改成: One of the BEST Yoga studios (not es) in Toronto. You could find a variety of Yoga classes for any levels, either beginners or experienced practitioners.

- BTW, another sales promotion could be: Bring friends to join your club and get more discount or a free class.

- Last but not least, congratulations! Good for you!

(#1160@33)
Last Updated: 2010-7-23

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姐妹们！欢颜健身的网站已经做好了，8月21号做 ZUMBA open house class，大家帮忙看看网站，给提提建议，指点一二:) -happyeveryday(天天欢颜); 2010-7-22 (#1112@33)

美女，哪呢？我这么没看到网站的连接啊？ -mayazhou(小米粥); 2010-7-22 (#1114@33)

刚才忘记了加了，改下贴，就1分钟就被你catch了！ -happyeveryday(天天欢颜); 2010-7-22 (#1116@33)

报告：倒数第二段文字咋出现一个问号？ -mayazhou(小米粥); 2010-7-22 (#1119@33)

修改完:) -happyeveryday(天天欢颜); 2010-7-22 (#1123@33)

报告:为啥图片动,整个文章都跟着跳?现在流行这样? -mayazhou(小米粥); 2010-7-22 (#1120@33)

主要是图片尺寸的问题，我修改下，多谢你的意见！请继续捉虫！ -happyeveryday(天天欢颜); 2010-7-22 (#1122@33)

报告:网站的信息很全面. 板块清晰. 祝贺新课即将开张! -mayazhou(小米粥); 2010-7-22 (#1121@33)
about me: when my daughter is one year ago? -mayazhou(小米粥); 2010-7-22 (#1124@33)

再改！ -happyeveryday(天天欢颜); 2010-7-22 (#1126@33)

新张贺喜 -njt(不远万里); 2010-7-22 (#1125@33)

多谢你给我拍出的那些漂亮的片片,鲜花n朵奉上:) -happyeveryday(天天欢颜); 2010-7-22 (#1127@33)
同恭喜，祝开业大吉，生意兴隆，呵呵。 -myangel(天使在人间); 2010-7-22 (#1129@33)

哇，网站做得很好看！待俺进去观瞧。。。 -ingale(Jess); 2010-7-22 (#1132@33)

Home主页，倒数第3段，倒数第3行"Yoga Classes brings us...”, bring后面的"s"应该去掉。 -ingale(Jess); 2010-7-22 (#1133@33)

多谢！改之.... -happyeveryday(天天欢颜); 2010-7-22 (#1134@33)

zumba open house is starting soon 用“coming soon "比较好些。 starting一般指的是马上开始了，比如5分钟之内。 -myangel(天使在人间); 2010-7-22 (#1135@33)

改之...,多谢！ -happyeveryday(天天欢颜); 2010-7-22 (#1140@33)

“About Me"的 statement需要再润色，最好请本地人或者英语达到本地人水平的国移朋友校对修改一下，有些语句念起来不是很通顺。 -ingale(Jess); 2010-7-22 (#1139@33)

+1 -melodyofmay(lynn); 2010-7-23 {776} (#1160@33)
In addition,
- Home -> what's new
"If you would purchase any kinds of punch-class cards on Open House Day, you will get one Free Zumba Class."
这里的would好象应该去掉，or make it short as : Purchase any package on Open House Day and receive one Zumba class FREE!

- About Me -> Friends -> Yoga Sanctuary
"The one of Best Yoga studioes in Toronto. I recommend you could find lots of beginning and advanced Yoga Class.
是不是可以改成: One of the BEST Yoga studios (not es) in Toronto. You could find a variety of Yoga classes for any levels, either beginners or experienced practitioners.

- BTW, another sales promotion could be: Bring friends to join your club and get more discount or a free class.

- Last but not least, congratulations! Good for you!

多谢！终于抓到一个可以帮我润色的人，还有啥bug,再帮我找找！ -happyeveryday(天天欢颜); 2010-7-23 (#1163@33)

PMed. -melodyofmay(lynn); 2010-7-23 {66} (#1177@33)
做了些改动，不过我水平有限，建议再找高人或本地人看看吧。为你加油！

恭喜恭喜，祝学生多多，生意火火 -mapleleaf789(相约多伦多); 2010-7-22 (#1136@33)
哇塞, 网站也搞的很专业哦. 生意肯定能火. 恭喜生意兴融, 开业大吉. -in-out(快乐地生活); 2010-7-22 {51} (#1141@33)
等你的网站FINALIZE了,我会转发它给我的朋友和同事．

多谢！ -happyeveryday(天天欢颜); 2010-7-24 (#1199@33)

嗯，动感十足的网站，非常棒。 -cutiepie_sherry(深呼吸); 2010-7-22 (#1146@33)
恭喜恭喜，开业大吉，生意兴隆！：） -firefox(火狐之花飞花花非花); 2010-7-23 (#1149@33)
恭喜开业大吉！人美网站也美，色彩绚丽，很喜欢。 -pinksky(怡然); 2010-7-23 (#1152@33)
恭喜恭贺. 特别喜欢网页的那个色彩. -melissa2006(静言); 2010-7-23 (#1162@33)
网站做的真好，清新明亮的色彩和你充满阳光的笑容让人一看就有快乐的感觉. -liliyar_chen(粒粒橙); 2010-7-23 (#1164@33)
恭喜恭喜，网站做得非常漂亮而且专业！ -meizi(梅子); 2010-7-23 (#1167@33)

原来是那天很活跃，很“不容易”的妹妹呀。 -gracelht(婷婷); 2010-7-23 (#1174@33)

还有一些语法错误和用词不当的地方，我干脆把你现在的copy下来，给某人全改掉再发给你吧。 -ramble(天很蓝); 2010-7-23 (#1184@33)

支持！！ -happyeveryday(天天欢颜); 2010-7-23 (#1185@33)

恭喜欢颜，开业大吉！网站做得不错。 -judytor2005(judytor2005); 2010-7-23 (#1189@33)

那段Zumba Fitness的录像要是能换成你带着做就更好了。 -judytor2005(judytor2005); 2010-7-23 (#1191@33)

你说的没错，这个是下个目标:) -happyeveryday(天天欢颜); 2010-7-24 (#1202@33)

missing text for me. -minimee(minime); 2010-7-26 {270} (#1221@33)
the first line on the page, You're using IE6 to browse right now, our site will work better for you if you upgrade to IE8 or switch to another brower....
I can not see "upgrade to IE8 " and "another brower",, because the font color is same as the background color
祝贺欢颜，上去看了，真是个充满热情和活力的网站，一看就强烈的感受到一种要去参与的冲动，非常棒。如果我到时候能抽出空的话，一定要去当你的学生。 -ava_green(豆芽); 2010-7-27 (#1226@33)

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